inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
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2004-08-08
04:29 PM
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In this world that suspends now, i fall silent, a sleeping flower, yearning to dream you;
the moon becomes my proxy, watching the nightsky though fading forlornly, as the rain takes her shadow,
in tones that are fading, she strains, if to speak now, but is breathless, at a standstill a tear on the soaked sky;
and i wonder if she saw you as the flowers sing of morning.
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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
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2004-08-08
04:44 PM
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Stunning imagery Michelle... could feel the tears of morning TD
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iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
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2004-08-08
05:09 PM
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"the moon becomes my proxy,"
I loved the poem, Michelle, and this one line.....just blew me away. ....jo
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ice
Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
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2004-08-08
05:19 PM
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Inky...Nice work...:-) I am reminded what poetry does to me when I read a piece like this....compact, precise, well done.... IlianaJo I liked that line also, but this is the one that blew me away...
"a tear on the soaked sky;" enjoyed --------ice ><>
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Kahlil
Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881
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2004-08-08
11:48 PM
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"the moon becomes my proxy" "and I wonder if she saw you"
IWIHWT.... Beautiful...just what we could expect from a goddess...
K
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passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
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2004-08-09
01:32 AM
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you write beautifully of nature
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Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
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2004-08-09
07:12 AM
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At writing poetry, you are a natural(ist)! This was especially poetic and beautiful, Dear Goddess of many things! ![](/pip/smiles2/angel.gif)
![Flower](http://smileys.smileycentral.com/cat/16/16_4_15.gif) EA
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LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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2004-08-09
07:14 AM
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Beautiful!
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Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
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2004-08-09
07:15 AM
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Delightful! Totally after my own heart ... Love and hugs. Margherita ![](/pip/smiles2/squeeze.gif)
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bklynboy
Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660
florida
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2004-08-11
04:35 PM
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Soothing
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Contabo
Member
since 2001-11-21
Posts 159
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2004-08-11
05:54 PM
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as I read that, gymnopedie no.1 was playing in Winamp....what a beatiful combination.
softly, Contabo
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JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
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2004-08-12
08:03 PM
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Lovely...James
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jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
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posted
2004-08-12
09:58 PM
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The was beautiful, my friend!
jwesley
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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
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2004-08-13
01:30 PM
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![](/pip/smiles/smile.gif) thanks for stopping by
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