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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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I died today in a split second of clarity I let go the binding realities that often held my heart on tight strings pulling me into safely folded spaces. I died today and Buddha says it was a job well done, but… this lesson will heal the inconsistencies tethering me solidly to doubt and nothingness comes in waves and chanting less melodic when the mantra sings ~a little less suffering, please a little less suffering for me.~ did the dhamma forget to whisper the missing truths to me how the end lacks emotional contact and peace is deeper than it ever did seem in waking moments I was breathing my eyes were blinking my heart kept beating and yet life evaded me until I died until I died today I died to find just how alive I’m destined to be. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Mutes (the venerable cuted one) -- Ah, yes....a wise man told me that we have seven deaths to go through....I cannot even imagine! Enjoyed your words of wisdom and so glad that you're still living!  ....jo |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Bravo! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
muted "today I died to find just how alive I’m destined to be." Impressed here! |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
muted ...dang this poem made me remember just how good you are , sweet surrender lol the beauty of your heart shines through beyond death ...,,,, a strong write babe, as you are .. ((hugs)) wolfy |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dawn~ What a beautiful render from your inking well~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
today I died to find just how alive I’m destined to be. Indeed very impressive and profound. pretty one  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
excellent! |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
What a coincidence... I died today too. Great write. You have a ton of talent that is beautifully displayed here. *Allison* ~~~***~~~Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland~~~***~~~ |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
What a coincidence... I died today too. Great write. You have a ton of talent that is beautifully displayed here. *Allison* ~~~***~~~Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland~~~***~~~ |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Beautiful write.......very wise, powerful, intuitive... Tangled as my hair, |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
beautifully written...very nice dawn Pimpin and panderin, on a level you can't serve, dismantle, nouns, pronouns, adverbs, and verbs |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Everyone took all the good words... I'll just applaud. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: This is an awesome experience and an awesome write! Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
today I died to find just how alive I’m destined to be.  Incredible...  just incredible... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Kiss the mirror for me on this exceptional write, Dear Unmuted One!!!  Appreciative hugs, EA  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
bravo my firend... bravo... the presentation is wonderful.. the message wise.. and if it applies to you personally.. then I simply bow humbly..at the growth |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Dawn~ Really enjoyed this....and I agree with everyone else... I am saving this. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I was breathing my eyes were blinking my heart kept beating and yet life evaded me until I died until I died ==================== and Joni sings "dont it always seem to go.... this read with peotic melodics...very cool write poetess Dawn...good to see your name here today.  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Yup.....amazing! Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Just last night I watched a Doc. on people that are in a Coma it was very informative.I learned things I never knew. Good write BonBon  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
muted, Glad to read your thoughts again. They always stir my thinking. miscellanea |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
You feel like you died, but we lived was watching over us maybe ?or it was the burrito's ? It's not the blindfold that blinds you, |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I absolutely love this poem. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
i wasnt going to comment back this time, but after the overwhelming responses i just have to take a moment and really sincerely thank all of you for your lovely uplifting replies. thanks you guys, for making things seem a little more alright |
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