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Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2004-08-05 05:34 PM

The teakettle’s whistle
seems far away,
although my fingers could
skim steam
from where I sit,
in his small kitchen
with red walls.

it is the amber time of day;
winds tease mantis patterns
across gossamer curtains.
he has a singular smile:
a secret.

I suspect the tea he pours
is not from black leaves,

but infused by flowers.
Once drunk,
two faces will lean in
to kiss mine

and his tongue will graze
forked stripes
along my throat

like wax
from a candle aloft.

I’ll awaken at 2 a.m.,
leave before he sips
my regret.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2004-08-05 05:55 PM

Very good write!
Love, Margherita

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2004-08-05 05:55 PM

hmmm... this my friend... is a wonderful write.. with all sorts of ways the thing can be read.. but in each an imagery that is superb

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

3 posted 2004-08-05 07:15 PM

Interesting, and that's a good thing

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2004-08-05 07:54 PM

Whoa Corinne, I love where your words take me. Have I told you lately, how brilliant I think you are?

It's a keeper.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

5 posted 2004-08-05 08:14 PM

"Once drunk,
two faces will lean in
to kiss mine

and his tongue will graze
forked stripes
along my throat

like wax
from a candle aloft.

I’ll awaken at 2 a.m.,
leave before he sips
my regret."

An intensity Lestat himself would thirst for...

IndigoEve
Member

since 2003-01-10

Posts 279
Etched in the illusion of time

6 posted 2004-08-16 10:31 AM

"I?ll awaken at 2 a.m.,
leave before he sips
my regret."

2 am is a beautiful hour, isn't it?

If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2004-08-16 10:41 AM

it is the amber time of day;
winds tease mantis patterns
across gossamer curtains.
he has a singular smile:
a secret.

~*~

I'm glad I didn't miss this Corinne...

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-08-16 11:51 AM

wow

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2004-08-16 01:11 PM

Corinne

Very impactful!

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

10 posted 2004-08-16 06:11 PM

Thank you all for commenting! I've been away for a week, so I was quite shocked to find this on page one.

Thank you!!!

Corinne

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

11 posted 2004-08-17 12:30 PM

Whoa......chilling! Great write!

....jo

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