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Crying Alone
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Crying Alone |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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When we are bound to distraction when words on lips are missed tears slip past the gaze of comphrehension. Eyes that did not see are unaware of the weight of one drop as it seems to pull the color of skin away with its slow descent to evaporation short lived each but many and they streak pale bulbs corrupt the light lashing with tiny red strokes. All of my impurities are right here on my sleeve. This is Me"---Faith Hill |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
this has an audible ache |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You captured a portrait here, seldom seen... Good to read you, although I ache to read some happiness from you too, I'll not complain. Hugs, Jen.  |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
 yep.Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"short lived each but many and they streak pale bulbs corrupt the light lashing with tiny red strokes." Best descriptive phrasing I've read in a long time. The pain is indeed palpable. Quite an effective write Jen. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
It is like being a submariner riding inside the tear and following it down your cheek into oblivion... Impressed.. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yes, this is impressive writing. I doubt I could have written this as well. |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
very good,it really hits home with me. Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
crying alone ... yes thats where I am at , the way you described it is exactly that Hope |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
This should be a painting! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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