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Sensing Truth |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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A whisper on the wind caresses nothingness and stillness, sour with the bitter taste of words too full of meaning to be heard. A hand glides through air, feeling for connection. Trembles with loss of kindred, seeking warmth long forgotten, no longer there. Smelling dissipation, draw of breath searing lung, drowning in the fill of a multitude of black regret. Pain of lack sniffs the loss of depth. Tasting total demise, the slouching of flesh to an oozing degree of loneliness profound. Swallowing excess muck of countless tries. Eyes, oh Lord eyes, swollen with dark knowledge of what was, what is and what will never be again crying out in beseeching shrill of a hundred denied lies.. and still… I am sour with the bitter taste of words too full of meaning to be heard. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Enjoyed, I find it inspirational A whispered wind touches nothing As through barren branches sing Then stillness sours the words Not spoken, silence unbroken. A hand glides through air But only emptiness is there, No depth of warmth is heard The truth is gone forsaken. Gloom |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"and still… I am sour with the bitter taste of words too full of meaning to be heard." Fascinating write. The last few lines were a perfect close! Enjoyed. JL  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 understanding this |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ranks among your best kid... well done |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Oh, what a write. I felt chills and heat both in this one. |
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elfine Junior Member
since 2004-06-08
Posts 35traveling |
This is the best line ... "I am sour with the bitter taste of words too full of meaning to be heard" Makes you want to spit them out ... and yet one can't. (Or can, if it's poetry!)  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Damn fine write Myrtle. And a bunch of other stuff I already told ya...  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Susan, a very powerful write. Much feeling and courage...as well as a degree of sadness. Well written..yepper! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Gotta agree with the Cap, but now YOU are worrying me... I found it hard to breathe while reading this'n Suze... you translated despair that aptly. Hugs? nod Hugs. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
This was absolutely awesome, Susan. I felt an analogy with the addiction of smoking, very deeply written and felt.  ....jo |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing....James |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Did I mention that this is really a great write??? Oh well, don't wanna repeat myself then... |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
Wow. I'll be reading this awhile... |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Ah, Truth... I've heard of it... kind of hits you like a sledge hammer... it can be a good tool though for tearing down the walls.. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you everyone! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
of words too full of meaning to be heard. =================================== man I wish I had wrote that line. powerful writing Susan... edgy and dark with a kick, ( and a bite) Very well done. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Susan, I thought I replied to this yesterday. I'm so glad it came to the top again so I can tell you how very well I enjoyed and understood this awesome write. Hoping you have a beautiful Florida day! miscellanea |
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