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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Pledge The young time of us granted That for better, I would abide the worse of you; While we rode poor waves to a richer beach Then back again, And back once more. Who needs one in health, for Only in illness does the cling begin, And static frayed because you wouldn’t see When I was really there, your mind Wandering off aways onto a time before me, Magnifying her sins, not mine. Never would I have imagined a union So one-sidedly “all about me,” When I once believed it might be my me that Helped you find you, though you never really needed My me to elevate your you, except As window dressing. That you I knew when the pledge was given Has evaporated like an early morning dream, Leaving me to dust motes of that you Who was once, my love. At least I enjoy the lemon scent, Even if I have to search for respect by Drawing my own name in the dust of dust. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
bad day in Bedrock.... I always knew there was a reason for the lemon scent in pledge.. just wasn't sure till now what it was for. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"When I once believed it might be my me that Helped you find you, though you never really needed My me to elevate your you, except As window dressing." Deca!! So good to read you! I used to know someone like this.. made me feel like no more than his trophy to be paraded here and there on his arm. Love ya lady~ ~ Those who complain the sun has gone out of their world |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Impressive words! Sometimes this happens, but .... how sad! Love, Margherita |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oh my goodness. Decaflame, this is excellent, and another addition to my library! hugs, Chrislane "At one glance |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
so true for those who have lived it...  M |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
My first marriage...hmmmmm, yes....to a tee. Enjoyed your writing (even though sad). .......jo |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Deca "Who needs one in health, for Only in illness does the cling begin, And static frayed because you wouldn’t see When I was really there, your mind Wandering off aways onto a time before me, Magnifying her sins, not mine." What a poignant hurt life can be....and you just can't rub it out. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Perhaps Formby's might work better? the unvarnished truth.... I liked it. |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Reb? Quite likely, and glad you took time  Martie, no, no rubbing out - but perhaps a change of furniture...  Iliana...sis...I know... So true indeed, Maureen... Thank you, Chrislane... Margherita, sometimes...and sometimes not. Those are the times to appreciate. Enchantress, aren't we glad you don't know someone like that any longer? Cpat, I understand you can get orange now, as well. Your preference? |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
At least I enjoy the lemon scent, Even if I have to search for respect by Drawing my own name in the dust of dust. Is it "Oh!" or is it "Ow!" that this poem gives me the most of....? No matter, this drink is spiked with real, from the ice-thinned spirits at the top to the unwelcome dregs at the bottom. The shame of it is, that when it's "all about me" for one, the other is crowded out and excluded, leaving them with an unwanted "all about me" of their own when what they really wanted was a chance to give. Library with this one? You betcha! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Never would I have imagined a union So one-sidedly “all about me,” When I once believed it might be my me that Helped you find you, though you never really needed My me to elevate your you, except As window dressing" I can only sit here reading, and rereading the raw truth of this... amazing. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"click" |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very impressive write!! Enjoyed. JL  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A very clever, yet ever so sad, write... EA |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Raw, unique... absolutely excellent! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
though you never really needed My me to elevate your you, except As window dressing You know I too knew someone like that once, and I am happy to say, she wakes up smiling every day now having learned the difference between being lonely and alone. This is heart-wrenching. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
That you I knew when the pledge was given Has evaporated like an early morning dream, and our dreams continue, but sadly, never like that again. You made me weep Decaflame, but that's the way of poetry I suppose, I know this too. Oh so stirring this is, and so very nicely done. |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Bluesy, next time I'll send a hanky...but yes, I cried too. Thank you. Bless you, Vandana Yes, Mys, you've been blessed with a lot of personalities in your lifetime; it's in this way we soon divide the wheat from the chaff. Thank you for reading, as always... suthern, you, the queen of raw...I do thank you for your own poems...keep teaching... thank you, EA JL, quite the comment. Thank you. Susan, thank You for the *click* Rat? Both, sir, both. Thank you for your eyes. |
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