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Alicia
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0 posted 2004-08-02 12:02 PM


and it is midweek:

i scream about the tendencies of wood and bone
you tear reason into small splinters
something sharp enough
and we are short heaps now
constant only in our minds.

sometimes we walk or wilt
sometimes north
and as we trace the explanations slowly
as we collect ourselves inside of them
we begin to understand the miles or measured space
between what is right and healthy
and what is wanted.

and,
as we are not yet what is beautiful
as we are not the dancers daring – we wait
or hush our conclusions into pin-tucked packages
and agree always to hope.

(then)

we speak of boxes:
(this is inevitable)

i sit next to you in the heat of late july and decide finally
that we are merely bones, sewn dry and collecting
something small enough to bury.

and you wade, knee high, satisfied for the most part
though i see you lean or ache and know that there is trouble.

you,
gentle hands begin to thread my heart with fear
begin to wonder if we will experience loneliness
and i can taste the sadness, your empty, hollow mouth
and slap it impossible.

i explain (and try to believe) in small, simple sentences – again
that measured space and its necessity, that balance created.

and we are small.
our voices hang in low swings from the branches
but only for short afternoons or sick and storming moments.

so, when we place each other into our damp, dark circles
into the soil cage that is this earth – we must let go.
we are bones. our minds bend and bend
but never remain.

(though)

for now, the tomorrows that do come
that soft slide of another dawn - morning
creeping underneath my head, silently through the heaviness of my hair
manages to settle me. pieces arranged on the lawn
pieces attempting to root, pieces hungry
(not with that naïve nod that suggests that i am dreaming)
not with the idea that we will stay, forever
but with the hope in slivers that we agreed upon.


© Copyright 2004 Alicia - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2004-08-02 12:06 PM


May this be so then.

My god/dess woman you've been missed.

I need to read you daily, yanno that?

such beauty in a shrug.

I feel totally witless after reading you, as well I should.

as well I should.

<--this is awe.


Martie
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2 posted 2004-08-02 12:08 PM


Alicia

Your poetry is so edgy and honest...I can read it and nod my head, but I can't tell you I understand, I just know that I do.  Good to see you!

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3 posted 2004-08-02 03:09 AM


I have really, really missed reading you, Alicia. You always pull from deep within, allowing the reader just enough of a glimpse to hope for more.

"and you wade, knee high, satisfied for the most part
though i see you lean or ache and know that there is trouble."
yep, this is what I'm talking about

Sunshine
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4 posted 2004-08-02 05:40 AM


Alicia!  Welcome home!  We've missed you - I don't know the reason for the haitus, but please...stay awhile, and share some more!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?  Keeping in mind, I must stand close...

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5 posted 2004-08-02 06:35 AM


Oh my god....it's so good to see you here Alicia, please tell me you are staying. I've missed you.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2004-08-02 08:43 AM


i scream about the tendencies of wood and bone
you tear reason into small splinters
something sharp enough
and we are short heaps now
constant only in our minds.

sometimes we walk or wilt
sometimes north
and as we trace the explanations slowly
as we collect ourselves inside of them
we begin to understand the miles or measured space
between what is right and healthy
and what is wanted.

=======================


OH MAN...I cant even get past my awe and admire of the first two verses to move on to the rest of the write...

so powerful...so deeply personal...such awesomely written personifications....


as we trace the explanations slowly
as we collect ourselves inside of them
we begin to understand the miles or measured space
between what is right and healthy
and what is wanted.


WOW.....
what that part truly speaks of....
WOW.............
thats an IWISHIHADWROTETHAT kinda verse.
but then so few write with the unique honest raw beauty that you do...

HEY A-girlie...whats up??!!!!!!

Can a moth get in line to say you been missed round here.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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7 posted 2004-08-02 08:55 AM


That is quite the come-back poem!

~ Perhaps a bit heavy for my comfort level, but one hellova fine write!!! I do appreciate your talent!!!


EA

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8 posted 2004-08-02 04:13 PM


Alicia~
Stunning~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email - [email]noles1@to

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
9 posted 2004-08-02 06:17 PM


missed you... will be back
IndigoEve
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10 posted 2004-08-03 12:15 PM


I do not believe that I know you,
but these words are familiar, still.

If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
11 posted 2004-08-04 12:11 PM


Please say you're staying awhile, not that I've tired of going into your archives, it's just so nice to read your words again.
Mysteria
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12 posted 2004-08-04 01:07 AM


What a truly incredible gift you have.  It was sheer pleasure reading your work.
wayoutwalt
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13 posted 2004-08-04 01:14 AM


there are emotions that good poetry like this evoke in me that make me wanna swing back. hit hard. its inspiration. thanks for that.
iliana
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14 posted 2004-08-04 02:34 AM


Wow, I think this is the first time I have read one of yours.  Tremendous skill and great poem much enjoyed by me.  
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15 posted 2004-08-04 07:20 AM


very nice to read you again... there is always a quality in your offerings here that few achieve...
you certainly are and have been one of my favorites... so I hope to see more.

Enchantress
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16 posted 2004-08-04 09:22 AM


What a pleasure to read you again!
You have been missed!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ Those who complain the sun has gone out of their world
       ....have obviously never danced in the rain ~

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just out of reach
17 posted 2004-08-04 10:01 AM


This is truly a remarkable piece of writing.
I am tucking it away in my library to read over and over again. hugs, Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."


— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet

JL
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18 posted 2004-08-04 10:59 AM


Alacia:

This is absolutely beautiful!  Stunning write.

JL



Susan Caldwell
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19 posted 2004-08-04 12:31 PM


Ever read a book and are left thinking..

"I am never going to read anything that good again, hell no one will ever write anything that good again."

That is the feeling I was left with after reading this..

  

This is beyond impressive...

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

C?
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20 posted 2004-08-06 02:43 AM


there are certain poems that I see now and then that strike me.

"i sit next to you in the heat of late july and decide finally
that we are merely bones, sewn dry and collecting
something small enough to bury."

This is one of them

Local Rebel
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21 posted 2004-08-06 10:15 PM



From the first line I read I could feel you.

There is elegance to your articulation that prevails over damp,dark circles Alicia. No earthly idea why I haven't been exposed to you before, but, um, glad isn't exactly the appropriate word here.  I feel both exhilarated to read you and am as equally moved by the sensibility of the subject.

quote:

we speak of boxes:
(this is inevitable)

i sit next to you in the heat of late july and decide finally
that we are merely bones, sewn dry and collecting
something small enough to bury.

and you wade, knee high, satisfied for the most part
though i see you lean or ache and know that there is trouble



This is too, too disheartening to describe.  It is the best of poetry but severely intense.  I ache and fear the trouble.

EagleOne
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22 posted 2004-08-08 01:00 AM


Well I guess you can add me to the list of welcomers! So good to read you again, stunning as always. Take care!

"A spring shower was cause to run
Until you twirled me in the rain" ~ BDC

Alicia
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23 posted 2004-08-08 07:22 PM


~wow,...thank you all for visiting my words (which is all they really are), it feels nice to have been read, i'm not sure what prompted me to share but i did and your reactions just shock and amaze me, and gosh, i'm not just saying that,...these things are just such small collections of words/thoughts and feelings, something i must write but nothing that i find worthy of such replies.
*i just had an amazing week/weekend (busy, but amazing) and so, apologize for time taken getting back to this.
i appreciate your reading,...i am reading too. ~a.

Robert Joseph
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24 posted 2004-09-28 06:15 PM


The title seems to grasp, even a further calling of the essence of each line. Intriguing and commendable work.

          Robert Joseph

Christopher
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25 posted 2004-09-28 06:23 PM


"we are short heaps now
constant only in our minds"

This caught me the first time and somehow stuck with me. Your words invariably do that. I could spend an hour on every poem you write and still be pointing out new images/feelings/etc. Sadly, I rarely have that kind of time these days and often forego responding because I simply do not want to put a trite "well done" as a pip for what kind of mark your words make on me. So please understand that while I don't often reply, I always read and, so far at least, lol, I always appreciate.

C

Christopher
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26 posted 2004-09-28 06:24 PM


ps - love your website
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