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Drummerboy06 Junior Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 46Indiana |
The greatest pain I’ve ever felt Is rooted in goodbye. For you, my love and life so dear without you I would die. We talk for hours every day but I miss you just the same. I long to meet you face to face and hear you call my name. (Refrain) ‘Cuz you’re my girl The angel which I love. The one sent to me, Sent from God above. And you’re my girl who fills my every thought I won’t let you go my girl forever sought. You’re very special to my life more than you’ll ever know. I’m not complete without you here without hearing your hello. You mean so much to me my dear its just not fair at all. I’m captivated by you smile enraptured by your call. (Refrain) ‘Cuz you’re my girl The angel which I love The one sent to me Sent from God above And you’re my girl who fills my every thought I won’t let you go my girl forever sought I want you right here next to me until my days are done. For you are my one morning star my twilight and morning sun I need to feel your warm embrace and hold your hand in mine as we fall asleep together here and dream sweet dreams sublime. (Refrain) ‘Cuz you’re my girl The angel which I love The one sent to me Sent from God above And you’re my girl who fills my every thought I won’t let you go my girl forever sought ... my girl forever sought. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
David, straight and simple? perhaps you might take this to Critical Analysis for a strong critique of what you write. Most who write in the open forum will seldom give you a critique that is quite that much to the point. That is straight and simple. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
some good lines in here, and I sure wouldn't mind hearing the notes nice to meet you, drummer |
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