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Walking On Frost |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Walking on frost Lightly, limbs are lost. Taking my time In the cold The wind blows against my back Beckoning of what was left behind Walking, wanting The warmth of the fire But knowing I can't go anywhere I can't go home again. Snow on my cheeks And hair Penetrating, cooling my head, The tiny flakes disapeer. Walking on frost I look up towards ice glassed window panes And see two people laughing... I start to cry. The warm tears melt the frost beneath my feet. I turn around and walk again My steps, quicker, lighter Walking, now, on what has been lost. |
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kari Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104Hyde Park, Ut, USA |
I'm surprised a ton of people haven't replied to this! It tells such a sad story that leaves an impression on me. The simple, yet descriptive words tied everything in. The last line was especially good. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
'The wind blows against my back, beckoning of what was left behind' Wonderful line there Joy. This imagery filled piece was lovely  The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Thank you, kari and Isis. kari, yes, the last line I thought was a wonderful way to end this piece. It really ties it all together for me. JOY |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
A wonderful use of imagery Joy. Truly beautiful words. I believe many us have taken these same steps. Michael |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Great work Joy....I love frost.... ice glassed window panes... Beautiful Jennifer Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
This is a beautiful poem Joy. I love the descriptions. I woke to a scene such as this just this morning. |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Joy, this is a wonderful and emotional piece. I too can relate quite well. |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Thank you all for your lovely replies. I woke up this morning and frost covered everything! It was a beautiful sight! Nature's painting! JOY |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
A poignant piece. Wondrous There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief - Hendrix |
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Fairy Colours Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 169Sunrise,Fl,US |
Wow. You go girl --A Little Fairy-- |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
I love this poem just because you dont think in the beginning your thinking of something sad, but of winter...then the poem is downhill from there...i like this poem...i can sense much sadnes...if you ever need to talk just email me Starboards  "I wont look back, I wont regret, though it hurts like hell someday I will forget" |
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