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Rene_M Junior Member
since 1999-11-19
Posts 26Melrose Park, IL, 60160 |
My life has been A never ending roller coaster Ups, Downs, I've been through them all Seems like I've always taken a terrible fall No matter what I do or where I go I always end up in pain. Emptiness Loneliness Sadness Insanity These are my symptoms Is there anybody out there? who can help me from this madness Step forward, you are welcomed Anybody out there? willing to spend their time with....me Who wants to give it a try? Who wants to help? Any kind of help is welcomed I will open the doors but I must warn you what you're about to find out can be very Realistic Painful Depressing Upsetting Maybe even shocking and somewhat disturbing Do you still wanna go in? One other thing though Once you go in You may never go back Outside, could be very pleasant Inside, you can only find the truth Which could be both...pleasant and painful So, what side of the door would you like to be a part of? |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
Whoa!!! I'm a risk taker, but this one made the red flag go up. DANGER Very Dark Indeed Nice work -RS |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Welcome to the dark forums  Thanks for a great dark read, you'll be right at home here ------------------ The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Rene_M Junior Member
since 1999-11-19
Posts 26Melrose Park, IL, 60160 |
FreeByrd, Thanx for the compliment and most important Thanx for takin the Time to Read this. I'm glad U have like this, although it's dark, U gave it a chance, Thanx I don't know what else to say, I'm flattered and shocked all at the same time. |
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Rene_M Junior Member
since 1999-11-19
Posts 26Melrose Park, IL, 60160 |
Isis, First let me start out by sayin' that U have a beautiful name, it's unique and lovely. Ok, I just had to tell U that. Thanx for makin' me feel right at home. I'm extremely glad and proud to know that U liked this poem. U have no idea the boost of confidence that have now given me, Thanx to U I don't feel like I'm alone in this. I have read one of your Poems also "No Nothing" and let me tell U that I loved it. I'm not just sayin' that cuz U gave me a compliment, I'm sayin' cuz I mean it. N-Ewau Thanx again for takin' the time to read this poem, and U have no idea the way U have made me feel right now. Thanx to U, I feel like I've won the Lottery or that I Have become famous overnight, and that's pretty much the way I can describe it. I will postin' up more poems soon and I would really like it if U could read them, criticize them, and help me improve them. If that's cool with U, Well sorry to have made this so long, but it's just that I guess you'll never understand how happy and excited U have made me feel right now. Thanx again, I just hope that you like the other ones also. |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
Hey Rene, Welcome to the Dark Half!! Loved your poem! Intrigue like this always makes me want to "go in" and see what's inside. Like the saying goes, there's a fine line between pleasure and pain. Hope to hear more from you!! |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Rene, I'm no expert by any means, but I'll gladly pass on any ideas or advice ok? Michael the other moderator will too I'm sure. I'm so pleased you are so happy with the responses here. We are one big family, helping, supporting one and all. Looking forward to your next creation. (HUGS) ------------------ The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Rene forget to say thanks for liking my Isis name, this is why I chose it..... I am Nature, the Mother Of All, Mistress of the Elements, Sovereign of the Spirit, Queen of the Dead, Queen of the Immortals, The single embodiment of all goddesses and gods, My will governs the movements of the stars, The winds of the seas And the dread silence of the underworld. I am worshipped under many aspects, Known by countless names, I am Isis. When hunting for a really cool name, I liking history and the lores of olde, could not resist this, glad you liked it enough to comment on it Just thought I'd share that with you since you showed an interest. ------------------ The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) [This message has been edited by Isis (edited 12-03-1999).] |
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