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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
Caught in a landslide Swallowed by pride Where is the mind Searching high and low Will has been worn Heart has been torn Soul verses soul Fighting to let go Never saw it coming Think by now I'd learn How it goes And how the tables turn She was a new day 'Till the sun went down Heart has lost the way This time won't be found Dreamed of good things But never knew How one day dreams Turn their back on you See it clearly Toying with the brain Replaying over and over Again and again Gave away what Was promised to be shared To the one Who truly loved and cared Call it a vision A slice of daily bread Call it a nightmare Of what's been done and said Whispers in the dark Knowing it's not me Time after time That vision twisting me |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
What can I say that I haven't already said. You continue to speak to me through your poems. Another beautiful one. I especially liked the line "How one day your dreams turn their back on you", A lesson I have harshly learned. |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
Thank you yet again danni. Hopefully I can continue to speak to you (provided my brain keeps working!). I look forward to your responses and more of your work as well!! |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Yep. "How one day dreams turn their back on you" were the lines I liked the best. That seemed to tie the poem together, in the middle this time, not at the end where it usualy does. |
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Stevia Junior Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 28 |
Your poem really got me thinking. Its funny how another persons emotions can bring out so many similar ones in ourselves.Keep writing! |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Really liked the flow in this one, different and "grabbing". Great depiction of emotions as well. Great Job!  ------------------ Life is what you make of it... Not what you let it be |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
Thanks so much Joy Stevia and Thunder, guess we're all connected at the heart here! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Exquisitely Dark, lostboy. Dreams do seem to turn their back on you, don't they...or maybe it is us who forsake them? Something to ponder. michael |
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