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Hold On |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
What can I say What can I do I've got a secret, it's about you Trying hard, I just can't understand On the edge, I feel forsaken Dreaming of a love that's taken It won't stop It won't let me go I see your face And there I go My heart racing with my mind in tow It wasn't like something I had planned Hold on, I can win this Taking aim hoping I don't miss I have to hold on |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
Lostboy- I like this poem because it can mean different things to the viewer...LIKIN' IT, LOVIN' IT!!! good job! ------------------ "If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was" |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I agree it's intriguing in a way, good job  ------------------ The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
I really enjoyed this verse lostboy as....dreaming of love that's been taken describes many emotions wrapped into one small phrase....great work!Jenny Lee ------------------ Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I've been there too lostboy....really appreciate this piece.......! ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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