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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
I stood and watched the parade today my first in many years Fewer here than last I came the memories bring on tears It’s been some time since the war but every year they march Scars and crippled, homeless, riddled uniforms doused in starch A chance to serve, a young man’s dream to go and win the battle The terror that soon meets him would make your stoned head rattle Although I see it turning grey It seems like only yesterday Parades I wish they’d go away ------------------ |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
I like this a lot, but I think a better title might be parades? ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
Parades was the title when I started to write it. Go Away became the emotional title because I really do wish they would. Sometimes you don't need reminders. It's better to keep movin on. This is my personal take. I know there are others that say we should never forget. -RS USMC 67-70 Graduate University of South Vietnam ThanX for stopping by [This message has been edited by FreeByrd (edited 11-13-1999).] |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
I love this no matter what it's called. Great work and emotional! Jennifer  ------------------ Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, wonderful poem, FreeByrd. Michael |
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MacBeth Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 14 |
Very powerful indeed FreeByrd. I was introduced to poetry on a diet of mainly Wilfred Owen (british first world war satirist). A lot of the emotions and sentiments you express are very similar to those in his poems. Ever read any? |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I love it too, no matter what the title Free Byrd. Bravo ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
Thanks to all of you for your input. It is what makes me keep on trying. MacBeth No I haven't read any Wilfred Owen. I will certainly give him a try. |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Yes, wow! Great poem. |
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Deverone Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136San Antonio, Tx, USA |
This is so good... I can sympathize with your emotions.(also military).... Keep up the nice work....waiting to see more ------------------ Deverone "We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out". ----Ray Bradbury--- |
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