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Dark Poetry #1

How Now Brown Cow?

Chaotic Rumblings
New Member

since 1999-11-12

Posts 8
Here, there, everywhere

0 posted 1999-11-12 03:35 AM

Impaled upon dreaded disease
Neath chamber of lies, foundered, lost.
Christened wrong by poisonous decrees,
Ought souls bear such horrendous cost?
Honed sharp by fires with madness wrought,
Eeking out spadefuls of panic.
Rendered guilty without a thought,
Evidenced by dark moods manic.
Nary a word spoken in truth,
Tested, you crumbled...failed forsooth.

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

1 posted 1999-11-12 04:04 AM

Well, C.R., it's been a long time since someone's work made me think as hard as your poetry has. Awesome doesn't do justice this acrostic. I see so much beneath the surface here it's astounding. Wonderful job, welcome to Dark Passions.

Michael

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

2 posted 1999-11-12 04:21 AM

Much as I despise acrostics, you crafted this one well.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

Deep Blue Me
Member

since 1999-11-04

Posts 396
By a big lake

3 posted 1999-11-12 09:01 AM

I liked it CR
Michael's right, there's drown-in depth here.

DB

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Let's swim to the moon
Let's climb through the tide
Penetrate the evenin'
That the city sleeps to hide.
===The Lizard King===

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

4 posted 1999-11-12 09:01 AM

I have been incoherent many a time

Great job...I love acrostics!!

Jenny Lee

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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

5 posted 1999-11-12 10:56 PM

I find I like this very much...very coherent in fact!

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