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Amy J. Renz Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 26Newark, NJ, USA |
you can stab me but don't twist the knife it is so precarious that twisting act and you're so close the deep wound hurt but it will heal until you twist your knife |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Yeah, and all too often they twist it, then break the damn blade off in your back. Don't mind me, I'm just venting. This one struck a chord in me. Good job, welcome to the Dark Forum, Amy. Michael |
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suicidal dreams Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343Toledo Ohio USA |
Great poem Amy and I can say I feel the same as Micheal here. GREAT poem keep em comin ------------------ life is short kill quick |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Stabbing is bad enough,but the twisting will get you ever time!Well done! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
My ex's love to dance, They're twisting the night away. DB ------------------ Tongue-tied and twisted Just an Earthbound misfit... P. Floyd |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Nice work Amy  Jenny Lee  ------------------ Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. [This message has been edited by JennyLee (edited 11-11-1999).] |
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Bonedaddy Junior Member
since 1999-11-11
Posts 14Columbus NJ |
This imagry is so vivid in my mind that i can actually feel it...i know where you are coming from...A+ i love you bonedaddy |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
A thought for whom you speak and a simple retort from you. I am better than your words and so I have disarmed you The knife turned back on you twisting in delight. Familiar feelings. Nice work -RS |
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