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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
Dark silhouettes With a thousand eyes Impassive Slowly shuffle forward To crush the trees Topple the fountain And cross the sand to suicide. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
LOL, I'm sorry, this poem is wonderful, I'm just picturing zombie lemmings over here.....  ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Their daily ritual.... Very good poem, may I never give in to corporate death....(i.e. the zombie shuffle.) Michael |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Wow D....last time it was shards of glass.. now crossing the sands to suicide...how apt are you? I too envisioned...like SD's lemmings... I pictured rats....you have done well. Short and straight to the point!!JL...Mahalo to you too! ------------------ Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Nicely done. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Tammy Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 90 |
DB, this sent chills up my spine... |
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D.B. Whyte Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 94Crest Hill, IL, USA |
Hello T, Glad you liked it. Thanks everyone for giving it a read. I'm LOL thinking it does sound like a mammalian sequel to Godzilla. Maybe I should rewrite... DB |
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