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Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04

Posts 396
By a big lake

0 posted 1999-11-04 02:55 PM

Kiss the moon
Cold silver orb
Pinball in the cosmos
Caress a star
Hot needles in your hands
Feel space
Swim in blue blood

DB

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When I'm sad she comes to me
With a thousand smiles, she gives to me free.
--------Hendrix

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

1 posted 1999-11-04 04:49 PM

You forgot - "wake up in hell."
Good poem, though...had me soaring.

Michael

Deep Blue Me
Member

since 1999-11-04

Posts 396
By a big lake

2 posted 1999-11-04 04:54 PM

Now there's a completer!!
That's why you're Michael and I'm just Me.

Mahalo,
DB

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

3 posted 1999-11-04 07:02 PM

Hey, this is wonderful.....but what is it describing, exactly? I see either being high, being in love, or having an orgasm. Care to exlpain?

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

4 posted 1999-11-05 07:46 AM

I may be odd..but I see eternal love...

Jenny

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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.

Deep Blue Me
Member

since 1999-11-04

Posts 396
By a big lake

5 posted 1999-11-05 08:33 AM

Well sweetheart you are odd, and that's what makes you so wonderful to me. The question,I believe, was what does it describe? Being high, in love, or orgasmic? I'm not sure that it should be up to me to decide. Any art form, as a lowest common denominator, should be left to the reader/viewer/listener to judge for themselves where the piece should fall. Therefore I ask, What does it mean to you?

Mahalo for the critiques,

DB

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When I'm sad she comes to me
With a thousand smiles, she gives to me free.
--------Hendrix

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

6 posted 1999-11-05 12:06 PM

Enjoyed this one!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

DreadedOne
Member

since 1999-10-25

Posts 51
Odessa, TX

7 posted 1999-11-08 06:22 PM

I don't know that I'm reading this right either, but I think the title gives all the clues needed to this puzzle. Good poem.

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D.O.

Fear is overcomable, life is fleeting.
Dreams are reachible, love completing.

JOY 14
Senior Member

since 1999-09-22

Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

8 posted 1999-11-10 03:13 PM

I found this poem to be very mysterious. I liked it though.

Deep Blue Me
Member

since 1999-11-04

Posts 396
By a big lake

9 posted 1999-11-10 04:53 PM

Thanks Watcher- Nice jammies Dear! You're so consistantly there.
DO- That's an interesting thought.
Joy- Thanks for checking it out.

DB

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Tongue-tied and twisted
Just an Earthbound misfit...
P. Floyd

Deep Blue Me
Member

since 1999-11-04

Posts 396
By a big lake

10 posted 1999-11-10 04:53 PM

sorry Michael, my work cpu sucks.

[This message has been edited by Deep Blue Me (edited 11-11-1999).]

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