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Sad Puppy (an oldy) |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England 
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Here's a poem I wrote ages and ages ago, but I think it fits into this forum rather well, so here it is! Sad Puppy. Puppy settles down to wait Alone by misstress's front gate Cocking up an eager ear Strained for footsteps drawing near. Slowly realising she's late He thinks of when he last ate The food of her sweet voice's touch the nourishment he needs so much. He sits and wonders as he waits Morosely by those wooden gates Does she still love him as before Or not need Puppy any more? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Taken as it is, the story of a puppy, it's very realistic! They say dogs don't know if you've been gone 5 minutes or 5 months - it's all too long for them. But the deeper meaning is sad - don't we all sit and wait sometimes for that one person that can give us what we need? Good one Eric! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well Eric, Suffice to say I have felt like this puppy at least once in my life. Deeply sad, very touching. Michael |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Very well done Eric! Pleasant images mixed with dark themes, nice contradiction, very effective. ------------------ Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
Can't a puppy be too loyal sometimes...when the master doesn't even deserve it? Just a thought..Izz |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Puppy points out that he loves his mistress, and that she deserves the very best. Puppy sits up and begs and says, "Please mistress, come home soon and let me love you! I'll wag my tail for you, and let you scratch behind my ears and I promise NEVER to pee on the carpet!" Puppy looks at you with puppy-dog eyes. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
though i have cats, i think they have "puppy-dog eyes" as well   ------------------ PS: have you been to "The Alley" lately and cast your vote for "on a roll"? |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
Having 6 dogs,I can relate.And yes they don't care if your gone 5 minutes or 5 days.Their always glad your home.Now if I can only find a man with the same qualities as my dogs! ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
I know one...... |
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