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kari Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104Hyde Park, Ut, USA |
Sins that stain a guilty shoulder Attend to the wise for they're so much older Avoid temptation its so much colder Untangle the cobwebs in your mind and become bolder Caress the dreams; avoid the real The plaastered guilt that you can't peel Tears to obscure that you can't feel The poisinous life you lead that almost kills The wreckless days that never end My collapsed heart when to you I offend A smile of ecstasy you refuse to lend A pastel rainbow to be my friend The look of a God to surface the unknown The expression found in so remorseful a tone A faith my shadow won't be alone My buried light is finally shone Silence no longer comforts me. For that is when I think too much. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
kari, nice poem...the last two lines were killer! ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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suicidal dreams Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343Toledo Ohio USA |
I agree with Amy the last two lines are great as is the rest of the poem but the last two are so true for silence makes you think and times like this you dont want to think you dont want the pain. ------------------ life is short kill quick |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
From untangle the cobwebs in your mind... ...to The plastered guilt that you can't peel. I liked this very much...same emotions that we all would like to express so clearly! Jenny  |
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russelle Junior Member
since 1999-11-02
Posts 21Chicago, Il. USA |
the plastered guilt that you can't peel This is so true, and the guilt just continues to pile up until it feels like it is going to destroy us thats why we resort to the dreams and flee the real |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Very well done, Kari, The darkness ebbs from within. Michael |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Enjoyed the read.Nicely done. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
Without the pain we lose this art. I really enjoyed the pain you don't want. I'd say keep writing it, but not if you aren't able to direct the pain.It becomes too much at some point for everyone to channel. Don't let it crest the banks and overwhelm you. D.B. ------------------ When I'm sad she comes to me With a thousand smiles, she gives to me free. --------Hendrix |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Good work Kari. I must seek out more Kari poems..... ------------------ Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP |
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