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Dark Poetry #1

slip and slide

starchild
Member

since 1999-10-22

Posts 59
manchester, england

0 posted 1999-10-26 09:17 AM

slip and slide inside my mind
my ugly thoughts
are so unkind

see yourself and what you do
when i think
i think of you

my ignored and dirty flaws
my staring eyes
and drooping jaw

a smooth hand draws across my skin
my fingers arch
a wanton sin

fevered moving hard and fast
and thoughts of you
but will it last

the tension draws me to my knees
and there i go
and i am pleased

and shivering i think of you
of who you are
and what you do

and what you think and know to be
and what you'll never know of me

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

1 posted 1999-10-26 09:19 AM

Liked this much! Does anyone truly know another? Well done!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

2 posted 1999-10-26 11:11 AM

Very good Starchild...this echoes thoughts I
have had!!

Jenny

starchild
Member

since 1999-10-22

Posts 59
manchester, england

3 posted 1999-10-27 08:15 AM

hit me

D.B. Whyte
Member

since 1999-10-27

Posts 94
Crest Hill, IL, USA

4 posted 1999-10-27 11:22 PM

You've got me. I'll be watching for your next work, and impatiently at that.

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slomovingvehicle

Michael

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

5 posted 1999-10-28 05:16 AM

Wow, Starchild,
This is excellent. Has a super flow and a very powerful ending. Wonderfully done.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?

Deverone
Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 136
San Antonio, Tx, USA

6 posted 1999-10-30 09:15 PM

Took the words out of my mouth again.
Very nicely done and extremely powerful.....I really like this one.

Great Job!!

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Deverone

"We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out".

----Ray Bradbury---

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