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Dark Poetry #1

Bitterly Unforgiving

wolfie97
Member

since 1999-10-18

Posts 58
Newcastle, WY USA

0 posted 1999-10-20 07:25 PM

You played with my heart
Until it dropped, accident or not
My heart is here, there,
Little pieces everywhere.

I thought I was strong,
But you proved that wrong.
My trust in you is now gone.
Just here feeling like a fool.

I thought you were true,
I thought that you knew,
Trust is held, you see,
Bound by honesty.

When seams of truth
Are ripped apart
The grains of trust
Are vonerable and exposed.
Easily washed away
By the tears from my eyes.

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Garrett 'sneaky' Gall

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

1 posted 1999-10-20 08:23 PM

Interesting poem...but I feel like it ended in the middle...maybe an addition to it would make it a bit better...

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

2 posted 1999-10-21 08:38 AM

Nicely done,but it does seem to just drop off at the end.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

3 posted 1999-10-22 09:15 AM

I like ths but,aslo agree w/the posts made before me!

Jenny

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