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Dark Poetry #1

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Deverone
Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 136
San Antonio, Tx, USA

0 posted 1999-10-14 02:52 PM

My hands no longer shake
for this day I will make
a newfound solemn pact
in any manner to be exact.

My mind aches and the heart is sore
in my eyes there is no one more
gone is the appreciation
my heart has no dedication.

To find a place for feeling to hide
where no one else can get inside
to build myself a wall
that will never come to fall.

Behind it I will sit
my heart; no one else, will get.

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Deverone

starboards
Member

since 1999-10-14

Posts 467
longwood, florida

1 posted 1999-10-14 07:22 PM

I loved your poem because i feel everything that you have/do feel and i think that this poem was ment for me...that's a good quality in poetry...keep up the good work

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

2 posted 1999-10-14 07:50 PM

This is so good....could be me!!

Jenny

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

3 posted 1999-10-19 03:05 AM

Deep and painful emotions expressed here.Well done.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

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