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Patiently Waiting |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA 
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Waiting quietly, my hair is combed, in my Sunday best. Patiently I'm waiting, for the others to come. Listening to their words laughing to myself, 'cause they really don't know. I see your face in my mind's eye, and determine to keep waiting. I like the feel of my suit the silken tie at my throat, the spiffy shine on my shoes. I sigh, in exasperation. Though I should be kinder, in my waiting 'cause I know you have things to do before you go. You'll be here, when you are ready. I relax, and vow to be patient as they close the lid, as I hear the dirt thud on top. I smile inside. I can be patient, waiting for you, 'cause I have eternity. Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi Waiting for something.. I felt it rightaway. To wait is unbearable...but sweet burdens can be born. Sincerely A_L |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ok..this one got to me..now I'm crying!!  Darn good poem it was too! |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
How sad, reminds me of a song 'The Day You Went Away'.. My parents are elderly and Mum isn't well, and I worry for them for when one die's the other will just give up and join the first as quick as possible I think... Scary and painful for anyone no matter what the age. Death seperates us but it also makes us stronger, it isn't them, it's the loving of them and whether they are gone or here, it stays with us forever.. At least we have our love and memories to hold onto.... Beautiful piece hon  I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
What I like most about this is that it is the person who has died who is speaking and thinking, rather than the one left alone, as is usually the case. Novel approach! Uta Lotharingia "Wir wollen nicht Wert und Sinn ... wir wollen Unwert und Unsinn" Raoul Hausmann |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Thanks all, I was inspired by Brian Lumley's "Necroscope" series of novels (in as much as the idea of the dead still being sentient...) Anyway, I'm glad the perspective was appreciated. Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP "Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway |
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