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Hole of Darkness |
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Scarlet Lady Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 242Midwest 
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Hole of darkness I fell into I grappled in the dark When I lost you No hope to see the light I am crying I feel like dying No where to run No where to hide Can't turn back Now that it is done I just keep remembering When I felt the sun Cold and damp now I shiver to the bone I think I will just lay down And go to sleep Try to forget Try to scream And then try not to wake For the pain is too real When everything went dark It left a hole way too deep [This message has been edited by Illusion (edited 06-05-2000).] |
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Jana Tovey Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257USA |
That last line grips me - it really summarizes all the agony and despair that is expressed in this poem. Good poem. |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
i can feel you on this one. i also wallow in darkness. wondering when it will be enough and the sun will finally win this one. kynder The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~I too have a hole of darkness that I struggle not to fall into. Please take care. This is a wonderful expression. *Peace. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
That was a great work! The emotions and imagery in this were very apparent and striking. The terms are broad enough to convey general ambient darkness and ruin. Very impressive! |
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