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Jana Tovey
Member

since 2000-05-30

Posts 257
USA

0 posted 2000-06-03 12:11 PM

I am no dark lady
standing before you,
you who are good and true,
but I am hailed as the
spawn of the devil.
What would you
have me do?
Profess belief
for a concept
that I can’t grasp
no matter how hard
and how often
I try to behold it?
I have begged for that sign,
one sign,
is it too much to ask for?
and when no response
came from on high
I gave up hope
and built my own
philosophy to
live by.
Am I any less
than you?
Do I not follow
the same rigid guidelines...
making sure that I
do unto others
as I would have them do unto me,
giving back
all that I receive...
And more, when possible.
And do you judge me?
Does the Bible
not say...
“Judge not that ye be not judged.”
Wise words
although I
believe they originated
from a man...
a wise man
who saw the need
to govern and regulate
humanity in large numbers.
I do not denounce these words,
just beg to differ
on their origin.
I embrace instead
the energy
that exists within us all...
beautiful physics
says that energy can be
created...
but never destroyed.
My God is energy...everlasting
all encompassing,
Energy...more than the sum
of all the suns
in this and all other
Universes.

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

1 posted 2000-06-04 06:08 AM

Wow, the depth you went into with that poem is great. With one basic message in mind, you could break it down into so much and still not cloud up the meaning or be repetetive. nice job.

Jeremy D. Halstead

Jana Tovey
Member

since 2000-05-30

Posts 257
USA

2 posted 2000-06-04 10:08 AM

Thanks Jeremy. I put alot of thought into this poem.

Necro Draconis
Member

since 2000-05-19

Posts 115

3 posted 2000-06-04 11:52 AM

Wonderful

I totally agree. I've been waiting for a poem like this for a long time.

gothicmoth
Member

since 2000-06-05

Posts 89

4 posted 2000-06-05 02:59 AM

A friend pointed this poem out to me and I'm glad she did. This is well thought out as you said as the speaker seems to be looking back on years of decisions and struggles, both inner and outer."and when no response/
came from on high/I gave up hope/and built my own/philosophy to/live by." This is how many of the world's strongest beliefs have been built. What caught my eye the most was: "Wise words/although I/believe they originated/from a man.../a wise man/who saw the need/to govern and regulate/humanity in large numbers." The short phrasing empasizes the struggle, the thinking, the looking for the right words and the emphasis itself the speaker is putting on their thoughts. This is true throughout the whole poem. Very well written indeed.

Joel the wolf
Senior Member

since 2000-04-06

Posts 1333
Angels Camp

5 posted 2000-06-05 10:58 PM

I agree, very well written,
I live by my laws, not man's
nor man's books from history, what is written is by man.
I enjoyed the strength of it all.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Walter Poe
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 787

6 posted 2000-06-06 07:07 AM

I see the idea i live the reality
purity of mind is the key
see all that is true not the outer reality
look inside see what you realy are
then you will understand what we must do
what must be done in the name of humanity

"Prophet!" said I, "thing of evil!- prophet still, if bird or devil!-
Whether Tempter sent, or whether tempest tossed thee here ashore,
Desolate yet all undaunted, on this desert land enchanted-
On this home by horror haunted- tell me truly, I implore-
Is there- is there balm in Gilead?- tell me- tell me, I implore!"
Quoth the Raven, "Nevermore."

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