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fractal007
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since 2000-06-01
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0 posted 2000-06-02 07:17 PM


Here stands before us, the vista that is our future!
No more hunger, and no more war.
All of humanity will unite under one flag.

We shall harness the power of God to make you

immortal!

No longer will we need to serve a God,
For we shall be

God!

Together as God we will rise up,
And defeat the challenges Nature puts up against us!
Together we will defeat religion and art and ..and

..........

And...  

..

.

.

We will fall together.
We will all go in the same direction,
We will all end at the same time,

Together as God.



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Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
1 posted 2000-06-02 08:05 PM


Very interesting my friend, you have a few hidden points, great work and different.

Joel.

 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-06-02 11:29 PM


Different is an understatement!! I liked the start the world joining together under one flag as one race (people) but then it went sour.  Do you believe if we become people and not nations it'll harm us??????
Interesting reading and interesting topics!!

 I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



fractal007
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

3 posted 2000-06-03 01:23 AM


Let me clarify a few things for people who may have misunderstood this poem

Firstly, I do not believe a utopian society would be harmful for us.  The poem was not meant to critique a utopian society parse, but the methods of getting there.

I mean to satirize ideas of genetic engineering and other advanced biotechnologies, by showing what might become of us if we decided to solve our problems with them.

That's why I kept using the phrase

Together as God

I was incorporating the concept of humans "playing God" by using biotechnology.  

I guess I should have made this more clear.  I was simply parodying our carried away humanist ideas and how they relate to the future we want.

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
4 posted 2000-06-03 07:17 AM


We will fall together.
We will all go in the same direction,
We will all end at the same time,

Together as God.

I don't believe humanity will ever be united if it happens it will be in the way of Orwell's 1984. I don't think out salvation lies in the machine, it lies within our souls, within our spirits. great poem,    
I think it worked well as a satire.  


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"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Libraries gave us power
Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
Nicky Wire, A design for Life.

manic street preachers
"Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany
Culture, alienation, boredom and despair"

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