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Xeonox
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0 posted 2000-05-24 02:13 AM


I just got shot,
I know I am dying,
I hear the sirens blasting in the rear,
Death is getting nearer,
The blood is flowing from my flesh,
From the shot I received in my back,
My howling pain is all I can hear,
As I try to keep my mind clear,
Helps seems to be taking forever,
and the thought of death replays  over and over,
Just how I got shot I do not remember,
Whistling blast was all I heard,
Before I was knocked on the ground,
After that all seemed a blur
how death came so quick,
who knew it was my time to go



 Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

© Copyright 2000 Ronil B Tataria - All Rights Reserved
Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
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Angels Camp
1 posted 2000-05-24 09:23 AM


I've had the luck of never letting lead enter my body, but I’ve been stabbed, and I've kissed death's lips several times, it's not fun.
This is very vivid,
you poem has flavor.

Joel.

 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Lonelypoet
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since 2000-05-10
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Conklin,NY,USA
2 posted 2000-05-24 06:51 PM


Xeonox,
Very dark and forbidding, excellent poem.

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