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Jonas
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since 2000-03-03
Posts 796
Oregon

0 posted 2000-05-15 12:52 PM


Cut Me

A single exchange
slicing like a razor
through my very being
Turning my existence
upside down
Yet meaning nothing
simple play that kicks
a weakened soul

© 5/14/00
Gary Pence


© Copyright 2000 Gary - All Rights Reserved
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-05-15 01:51 AM


Meaning nothing to some, but everything to you.  So many pains in this world are often shared alone.  *hugs*  Great work  

 At last I have heard the song of enlightenment.... In your heart you can hear it now, if you listen....
It is the song your spirit has been singing since the moment of your birth. All lasting victories are won in the heart....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


ellie LeJeune
Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
2 posted 2000-05-15 02:33 AM


Jonas: I can never get over how cruel people can be. I've read your incredible poetry and your kind and encouraging replies to mine, so I know the beautiful spirit of you. There is no way you deserved that. Ask God to build your defenses against that kind of sharp arrows to deflect them. You deserve the BEST! Ellie

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Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
3 posted 2000-05-15 08:34 AM


My heart to you my friend,
this poem is so simple and pure, to the very heart of you, it doesn't scream but quietly proclaims a ?? lost and trodden upon spirit.
I have been there, and know it well.
Take care.

Joel.


 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

sgreybe
Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209
London, UK
4 posted 2000-05-15 08:51 AM


Dear Jonas

The pain you felt at that exchange is so evident in this spectacular work.  Quiet, but powerful.  We're here for you.
A great work, thanks.

Sylvia

Jonas
Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796
Oregon
5 posted 2000-05-15 09:55 AM


Thank you so much for your warm comments everyone  

I was really hypersensitive yesterday and I read something that bothered me. But I realize now that I took it wrong because of how I was feeling at the time. Thank you for the support and I am glad to have found such a warm group of people to share my writing and my feelings with!

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