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EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

0 posted 2000-05-11 09:46 AM


I lay here tonight, bottle in hand
Of me I ask, What kind of man?
Need to drink just to last the day
Know one day I'll be called to pay

The pain and sorrow, they've come back again
Oh why, oh why, please! Someone explain
Just when I think I've got it right
I get knocked down, have another fight

The past is past but I can't move on
Try as I might, can't find what's wrong
So deep and dark, the depression comes
Lost and alone, I can't find the sun

The battle raged, It seems so long
I can no longer sing the song
Can I go on? Is this life a mistake?
Give me courage for this life to take

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My first post in Dark passions, it didn't seem appropriate for open.


 Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien

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Brian McKeon
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since 2000-04-20
Posts 14
Rochester, NY USA
1 posted 2000-05-11 10:46 AM


I like this.  I've struggled with the bottle in my lifetime too and I know the dark and mysterious passions of drinking and the lowly depths we sink too in the midst of letting it take control for the evening.  

 

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-05-11 10:47 AM


painfilled poem here Eagle...
i know all to well how our pasts can haunt us.
I try very hard to not let it own me...
I refuse to let it (and them) take all of me.
I dont want to let them win, ya know?
I hope you are venting in poetry and not as lost as your verse, but I understand.
keep writing, it does help heal.
take care, please.
jm

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
3 posted 2000-05-11 02:09 PM


Eagle*  Your words are like drops of ice water....It hurts knowing that you went thought one moment like this.  I am comforted to know that this has passed and that now you able to look back on it and write of it and have the courage to live on.  This was a very powerful piece my friend.  

 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.


EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
4 posted 2000-05-11 05:46 PM


Brian....It would be all too easy to slip down that path, and on occaision I have come close.

Janet Marie.....the past can indeed come back to haunt us, and like yourself I hate to lose  .Don't worry! I am just venting here though i have been through such periods. life goes on, however difficult and unfair it seems at times. I have much to live for these days.  

Butterfliy....it would seem I am lost for words alot lately.   Your strength, support, and friendship are an insperation to me my friend. I have some thoughts on the idea of "courage to live on", ...mmm...perhaps another poem!  

To all, I thank you for taking the time to read and respond, take care!

 Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien

Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
5 posted 2000-05-12 01:07 AM


Well EagleOne, welcome to dark passions.
and yes this indeed is a dark poem, one that does belong here.
and yes I have traveled this road also.
it stinks. haha
on your last stanza line,
"Give me courage for this life to take"
I had asked for this strength so many times, I've tasted old blue,
but I guess I found the courage is in the living not the dead, like you did.
Good luck in all.
I checked out you web nice.
as is this poem.
Joel.


 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

SEA
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with you
6 posted 2000-05-12 01:44 AM


Eagle One~ I haven't had a problem with drinking, but I felt all the pain reading this.....not to say I haven't had problems in other areas.....so glad to know you are a fighter. This is an excellent piece. -SEA
EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
7 posted 2000-05-12 08:12 AM


Joel....thanks for the welcome and your comments.

SEA......the good things are worth fighting for......thankyou!



 Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien

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