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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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~Discuss~ I thought we could discuss not strike for understanding thought we could look maybe see eachother... perhaps halfway never expecting the violence you spit out spit in me my face my lonely eyes shattered existance stuck in your world thought we could discuss... for understanding windows crash with you music so loud burning it all hiding in the night from yourself, your selfishness hiding me from the neighbors from your truth your lies and secrets plastic cars melt... when all I needed was a ride on a dark road to a safe place. |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
My friend you are full of surprises. this is baffling? very unique. and interesting. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This it seems is a very dark and intense piece which left me feeling a little scared for you, don't no maybe I read too much into this. Sounds like abuse to me, tell me if I'm wrong, cause I hope I'm wrong. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Tracie,...thanks for the concern. I'm not in this situation right now...yeah, at one point I was but I removed myself. I strongly urge anyone else in this position to find a way out...thanks again for the concern. I'm ok  *And Joel,..thanks.... I think...baffling? that's good then....maybe the message shouldn't be so vividly displayed in this case. Thanks for reading as always |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi s..! Thats not at all a good thing to happen. I know and feel exactly what has happened and how it should have gone about. But I think it's a late realization. I love her so much and my urge was like in a youthful kid falling in love for the first time, a li'l impatient. But I'm not selfish as it's mentioned and I wanted to share every moment,every surprise life has to offer with that girl I ever dreamt off, but its kinda bizarre situation now, where all I can do is wait,wait to see her,hold her and convey my love to her and discuss what's gonna happen in future. Its a good work. Sincrely A_L |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Some pretty strong emotion in this poem. Glad its not a bad situation for you now. ~~nice writing~~ Danny A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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