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Dark Poetry #1

Tonight

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

0 posted 2000-05-01 11:27 PM

                        Tonight

                your carbonated addiction
                  exploding in my world
               purple stains of all you were
                    to a face so sour
                 so twisted out of shape
                    carbonated tears
                 little bubbles bursting
                 down a cheek so sticky
                  from your addiction
                your explosions leaking
                 taking over all I had
              overcoming you and your kindness
                forgetting I'm your child
                   so frail right now
                     so needing you.....

Joel the wolf
Senior Member

since 2000-04-06

Posts 1333
Angels Camp

1 posted 2000-05-02 02:08 AM

Well Spit, haha I picked this poem to make my #500, and what a surpize it is, I'm never disiponted with your work, sometimes baffling, but that makes my old brain work,

"forgetting I'm your child
so frail right now
so needing you....."

Well kid you know my E send and We'll talk.
again love your work.
Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

2 posted 2000-05-02 10:13 AM

That's powerful! An agonized cry to the oblivious. Well put.

j.

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