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Brian McKeon
Junior Member
since 2000-04-20
Posts 14
Rochester, NY USA

0 posted 2000-04-27 11:20 AM


I'm crawling in from the cold.
I've seen things that I've never told
and even if I were to expose my heart to you.
How could I ever be sure that you'd be there to hold?

I'm so cold, I've just bent my connection to you.
I said things that I knew were best left alone
but my pride is so strong and my heart so old
I couldn't bear to keep it quiet no more.

I'm lurking within these walls for the first time
was ousted from a place I held so close.
I spit my venom in to the faces that were threatening
and pissed into the eyes of all my hosts.

I walk a line so unforgiven and cold,
I've walked it since I was one years old.
Never will I lose my insane urge to break a heart
or my will break the model and the mold.


© Copyright 2000 Brian A. McKeon - All Rights Reserved
SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-04-27 12:32 PM


~Hhhmmm....very interesting...very well written.  You have quite a way with words.  My brain is still working with the last two lines......

*Welcome BTW!!!

dhuron
Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

2 posted 2000-04-27 08:35 PM


Welcome to passions.  Very good poem, looking forward to reading more
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 2000-04-27 09:05 PM


Brian, Welcome to Passions and the dark forum.
I like your style of writing, deep musings, pain and darkness perfect for this forum!!
Awaiting more.
Isis

 A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

4 posted 2000-04-27 09:33 PM


dark and passionate, you are in the right forum!

 Kathleen


JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
5 posted 2000-04-27 10:13 PM


dark and descriptive language.  Welcome.

Joy

kristi
Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 33
Yulee, FL
6 posted 2000-04-28 01:24 AM


Wonderful writing.  Hope to see more soon.
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