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~Can I Ask You This...~
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~Can I Ask You This...~ |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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~Can I Ask You This...~ Did you mean to break me when my body was frail and wilting? falling heart and heavy eyes smiles far behind lack of desire to be pretty for you for me for the world so unkind so unknown did you mean to break me, to run my tear ducts dry? to leave your evil signature across my face my heart I was fragile and you knew it I was scared and you thrived I was broken by the devil on a night when the moon never showed up........ never wanted to. |
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kari Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104Hyde Park, Ut, USA |
This is amazingly beautiful. My favorite was 'to leave your evil signature across my face; my heart' Very well depicted! |
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Kurly Junior Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 48 |
The way to gain is to lose, The way to your hearts content is to be sad. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Thank you,...really,...thanks for responding and thanks for the words...it helps.  |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
SpitFire~ Soo sad and lonley a poem  your words took be back along time ago when my heart was terribly broken and my spirit betrayed.HUG Tracie~ Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Spitfire, this is an Excellent Poem. Out of darkness comes strength. Now go put something pretty on, for YOU netswan |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Yes something prrrretty, Like a whispering smile that spreads out from us all to your heart. You can feel it can't you. You have a way of expressing your emotions to us, with small girls meekness that makes every man here want to hold you, but then the underlying strength of a tiger with powerful strokes of your pen, to trounce any foe, excellent writing my friend. Joel. I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Thank you all for your kind words....and yes,...I can feel it. It's great to be here. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading this...I've found that many times when someone's heart is broken by another the other one is so busy trying to get out of the relationship that they won't answer our heartfelt questions. They are selfish and thinking only of themselves. Their answer to every questions is goodbye. Take care of yourself. James |
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