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HelenaJ
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since 2000-04-04
Posts 81
Kitchener, ont. Canada

0 posted 2000-04-17 08:44 PM


I am in a state

Blurred eyes
and empty hands
Thoughts dancing
Emotions that lay still
in my belly
Every breath
a plea for something  
more
and with every rythmic
beat
comes a desire i no longer
understand
I hear only emptiness
Tastebuds crave a sweetness
they have never known

I am In a state


 The words that come to me here fail me elsewhere.
Mute.
Made dumb by my own thoughts.
Tonguetied and awkward.
Tripping over my own voice.
A pen and paper for my voice.

HelenaJ

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dhuron
Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

1 posted 2000-04-17 08:47 PM


This is great!!  The entire body craving something it doesn't know, what could it be???


Daniel

Hope, tears, and renewal
Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 74

2 posted 2000-04-17 08:57 PM


Incredible entry, HelenaJ.  We never really know what state we're in, do we?
Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
3 posted 2000-04-17 09:12 PM


Great work I agree, But, from what you said here,
"comes a desire i no longer understand"
You did know it at one point? and now not!
and the desire to,
"Tastebuds crave a sweetness they have never known"
You must have an Idea.
Good luck searching.
Anyway, great work again.
Joel. hahaha



 I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

HelenaJ
Member
since 2000-04-04
Posts 81
Kitchener, ont. Canada
4 posted 2000-04-17 09:33 PM


Thank you Daniel and HTR for your kind words and in response to you joel;
I think my desire has significantly canged
and the sweetness I crave has not presented itself in any sort of healthy form. i have loved. I need now only be loved with the same conviction. Thank you though for those words of encouragement.
The search continues!!!!!

kittyj
Junior Member
since 2000-04-17
Posts 32
CANADA
5 posted 2000-04-18 08:40 AM


"Tastebuds crave a sweetness they have never known",  I totally dig that.  What they craved before, was not real and true, just emptiness.  And the feeling that went along with it, was always gone by sunrise.  I will be there to listen to the birds in the morning with a clear mind and soul, oh I am learning so much from you sista.
Dark Usagi
Junior Member
since 2000-04-10
Posts 18
Oviedo, FL, USA
6 posted 2000-04-18 09:16 AM


I totally LOVE this! I hate the feeling you are feeling and if you ever wanna talk you know where I am. And for whoever did this to you didn't deserve you in the first place and you probley curse the day you met them as I do. But I am sure you will get over them soon...

 "Pictures are so perfect...in a perfect moment until you look into their eyes and truley see the storms of their soul"-Dark Usagi

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