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NamelessOne
Member

since 2000-04-09

Posts 197
Biloxi MS

0 posted 2000-04-14 04:51 PM

You

caught in the turbulence
and swirling eddies
of time spent without you
seemingly endless spans of chameleon sleep
useless time of no purpose

fragmented and ripped aside
by the ocher tainted wanting of you
having you
then being made to relinquish you
these barren torturous stretches
of hollow existence
punctuated by moments of shapecharged fury
demolishing the nothingness
with the sound of our own fusilade heartbeat

the fires of lust lighting a ravaged mindscape
of broken dreams and hemorraghing ideals
made to feel that feeling is the headsman
awaiting his time of action
rememberance,the blade operating with no conscience
it`s journey halted by the block
the damage done

An alternate universe where
nothing important is

there`s only the being with you
and the smell and the taste and the feel
of You

An anomaly state
where your smile governs a microcosmic cycle
of my emotional seasons

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

1 posted 2000-04-14 06:32 PM

Wow! Excellent emotional portayls here my friend, wonderful work. You make it appear so much more than mere love or lust

A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)

JOY 14
Senior Member

since 1999-09-22

Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

2 posted 2000-04-14 07:19 PM

Dark needed here. Perfect place to post this. Very descriptive, great language in this one, Nameless!

Joy

Joel the wolf
Senior Member

since 2000-04-06

Posts 1333
Angels Camp

3 posted 2000-04-14 09:16 PM

Powerful words, strong in one point,soft in another.
Emotions ranging off the scale.
Great.
Joel.

I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

dhuron
Member

since 2000-03-19

Posts 476

4 posted 2000-04-19 12:05 PM

Great Post!! The others have said it all, Very Dark and wonderful

Daniel

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2000-04-19 01:40 PM

Ooooweee! Sizzles....excellent!

kittyj
Junior Member

since 2000-04-17

Posts 32
CANADA

6 posted 2000-04-19 03:43 PM

your contrasts are so well done. i have a true image of this alternate realm still imprinted in my head. painful and soothing.
beautiful.
kj

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