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Hope, tears, and renewal
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since 2000-03-27
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0 posted 2000-04-10 09:20 PM


Look, there, watch all the people.
They don't want to cry and they don't want to bleed.
So afraid to live and laugh and so afraid to die,
All they do is stand back, afraid to take the lead.

They are all trapped in an endless dance,
In circles they all turn and spin.
Ignore without a backwards glance
The ones who can't join in.

So much for them to think about,
So they don't even try.
Continue with their mindless song,
Turn their backs on those who cry.

I don't want to be one of those people.
Fearing yet staying with their own mindless sham.
But I look in the mirror, and between tears I see,
As much as I deny it, that's what I am.

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1 posted 2000-04-11 12:02 PM


Hope~ Wow! This is great!! -SEA
dhuron
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since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

2 posted 2000-04-11 11:39 AM


It is often shocking to find out we are what we dislike and try not to be.

Great Poem

 The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship."

--Ralph Waldo Emerson


Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
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3 posted 2000-04-11 10:36 PM


Hope,
Excellent piece.  Very true....it is always hard to see ourselves how we really are instaed of what we thought we were.  This was great!!!  

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
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Angels Camp
4 posted 2000-04-12 12:14 PM


Your tears have distorted your vision, for one of “those people” you are not.
Very good.
Joel

AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
5 posted 2000-04-12 12:37 PM


beautiful..
and true...I liked this a lot...


 If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

NamelessOne
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since 2000-04-09
Posts 197
Biloxi MS
6 posted 2000-04-12 02:42 AM


Thats awesome Hope, the kind of work that makes you step back and have a look at how your own life is REALLY going.Thanks for the slap upside the head ,i can use one of those from time to time.
Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

7 posted 2000-04-12 08:11 AM


Oh no, no, a poet's words are not only reflected from the mirror but rarely blurred in tears and shine crystal clean....

 Kathleen


ShadowHeart
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since 2000-03-25
Posts 49

8 posted 2000-04-12 05:20 PM


Great poem my friend!  I know it's hard to find out that you're something you thought you weren't but all that you accused yourself of isn't true.  You aren't like that...

<3 Shadow


 Love is our greatest weakness
but when it's found,
it's our greatest strength.

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