navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #1 » He Sits and Waits
Dark Poetry #1
Post A Reply Post New Topic He Sits and Waits Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
achicade
Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 66
Marietta, GA USA

0 posted 2000-04-08 09:09 PM




He sits and waits as the night closes in,
for what he waits he is not sure.
His fear is real, of what he's not certain,
his life passed behind him like a blur.

He wants to overcome this pain,
the struggle is always too much.
If only he could trust someone, to
tell them, feel their gentle touch.

But they will run, they always do,
the pain is never eased.
He can't seem to find the way
to leave the misery behind.  Oh, God, please...

What will be his fate?
In the end it's easier to sit and wait.



 

© Copyright 2000 debbie hill - All Rights Reserved
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-04-08 09:20 PM


Welcome to Passions and the dark forum.  I can clearly see you are gonna fit in here in the Dark!!
Loved this, felt this way myself, but I've learned it's better to meet the fates head on than merely sit and wait..  

 A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


tracie66
Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
2 posted 2000-04-08 11:56 PM


Welcome to passions~
A wonderful family, you will love it here.
Great poem will watch out for more from you
Tracie~


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks


Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
3 posted 2000-04-09 01:30 AM


Achicade
This sounds like me two years ago.
loved it.
Thanks.
Joel...

dhuron
Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

4 posted 2000-04-09 02:36 AM


Welcome to Passions.

  Great First Post, and I agree with Isis.
Meet your fate head on instead of waiting.

Looking forward to more posts!


dhuron

 The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship."

--Ralph Waldo Emerson


achicade
Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 66
Marietta, GA USA
5 posted 2000-04-10 06:30 PM


Thanks for all the wonderful comments. I appreciate your feedback.  I've always loved to write poems.....

 God bless you all. :-)
-debbie-

Caitlin
Junior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 15

6 posted 2000-04-10 09:12 PM


I really liked this. I've felt this way myself before and appreciate the way you expressed it. Welcome...we're the new kids together!  
songwater
Junior Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 32
Marietta,Ga.
7 posted 2000-04-10 10:25 PM


Debbie,that sounds hauntingly familer...

 ?


Walter Poe
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787

8 posted 2000-04-11 09:35 AM


hauntingly familiar

very much real life

what we all go through it happens so often

  Hello darkness, my old friend,
I've come to talk with you again,
Because a vision softly creeping,
Left its seeds while I was sleeping,
And the vision that was planted in my brain
Still remains
Within the sound of silence.

AVANTI
Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
9 posted 2000-04-12 12:34 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS...
well done!
it's sad and true...
i'm thinking about youer end...and wondering...is it??? it is easier to sit and wait...


 If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

SEA
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 Tours
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676
with you
10 posted 2000-04-12 01:01 AM


Achicade~ Welcome!   Great poem! -SEA
Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

11 posted 2000-04-12 08:21 AM


Welcome to the forum! You won't be alone here I can assure you!
This was wonderful.

 Kathleen


Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #1 » He Sits and Waits

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary