Dark Poetry #1 |
Abandonment(a Haiku) |
kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Inseparable chums Dazzling lady appears Bewildered strangers pls tell me if this haiku makes sense to u all ") |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I don't totally understand haiku but I can see that a lovely woman came into your friends life and now he doesn't have much time for you. James |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
The charms of a woman will do it everytime, regardless of male bonding. |
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HelenaJ Member
since 2000-04-04
Posts 81Kitchener, ont. Canada |
Sure it makes sense. This very thing has made strangers of me and some of my closest friends. Sometimes a more intense love can win a heart. It's great. |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
I’m not sure if I’m looking at this in the same light. It seems to me that the Dazzling Woman was always there? and inseparable chums don’t know where she came from? This is why they are Bewildered ! With your title, added “Abandonment” they are frightened. Does that make sense to you. Joel. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
intresting haiku... i hav'nt seen other haiku's on dark passions... well that's a good change... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
LOL... makes TOO much sense to me. Great little poem. Loved it. Michael |
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NamelessOne Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 197Biloxi MS |
hehe friend becomes foe or at least a challenger,i liked it it made perfect sense. |
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