Dark Poetry #1 |
~Walking along the beach...~ |
Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Walking along the beach Feeling so lonely and so blue Noticing way ahead A man was walking too My stomach got in knots My hands began to sweat Dreams of this moment Was all that I could get The closer we walked The more excited I became Not seeing his face But I knew he was the same The man from my dreams Sweeping me away Showing me the destiny "True Love" is what I say I closed my eyes As I walked up to him Thinking of the happiness As the moon was very dim I reached out my hand As I could feel him touch me Slowly I opened up my eyes And all that I could see... Was the demon of my heart Standing in front of me Glaring at me with his evil eyes I began to cry, you see... For I knew I was doomed The demon of my heart was about to win I only wanted the love But now I am paying for my sins I walked with my demon Along the moon lit night Shedding a tear here and there With no happiness in sight Holding my hand tight He smiles and says to me.. "The darkness is in your heart, And soon you will surely see." I do not love you for being perfect..... I love you for being perfect for me!! |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
So sad, my demons don't visit me when I'm at the beach!! Sure we all have our demons, but we don't have to let them win!! Great work! There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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DziR Junior Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 11Sydney, Australia |
Your poem is so true!!! my heart reaches out to you, I can imagine how you feel, I've had many of those sort of dreams as well. The ones where you have everything in front of you, then all of a sudden it is snatched from you!! AS Isis said, don't let the demons win. Don't give in to their evil ways. Reach up and fight and then you shall see that all your dreams come true, you just have to fight for them!! |
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LeeSabina Junior Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 10 |
this was extremely vivid! Its the be careful what you wish for. Remember, everyone has a little light in their heart just waiting to burst out =) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh man this was an excellent poem. I absolutely loved it. Damn if my demons don't seem to cloud my vision when I'm only looking for the softer things too. beautifully done. Michael |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sometimes I feel this way..when I am reaching out for love and it is not returned I think that the demons have control in my life...perhaps it is a time to learn and reflect on my life...and perhaps I need to decide exactly what it is I want in my life. James |
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HelenaJ Member
since 2000-04-04
Posts 81Kitchener, ont. Canada |
As a hopeless dreamer I can definately relate to this one. Mine have yet to end the way I want them to. My demons are relentless. Thanx |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
I grew up on a beach, and learned to talk to my demons there. Sometimes they won sometimes I did. But I think I have the upper hand now. Loved it, Joel. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
DkW, Wow....almost missed this one. Excellent writing. Powerful images come to mind. It is like I can see it happening before me. Great work!!! Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Caitlin Junior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 15 |
Such an awesome poem. The emotion and vividness that pours from your words is remarkable. I think we've all walked with our demons...you described it perfectly. Keep up the good work! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
DkW~ this really spun me around! I liked it, sad she had to deal with her demons at the beach, that's where I go to escsape mine!! Very vivid! Great poem.-SEA |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
"Glaring at me with his evil eyes" Not at all what true love looks like! Joy |
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