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Hope, tears, and renewal Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 74 |
Can't shout. Can't cry. They'll hear you and ask What's wrong. Wrong? Nothing's wrong. My mask fell off... The wrong people saw the real me. What now? Now? Now we start over. We begin again. Swear to be real, The mask's already gone. Gone? Who's gone? Every part of me is here. And you? I don't know you. But maybe that's just as well. Well? We're all well. Well and fine. We'll just put our masks back on... Until we can be free again. Among the stars... |
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thebeautybrat Member
since 2000-03-30
Posts 114Florida |
I don't exactly get what you're trying to say in this poem. Are you expressing hate? or love? or what? I thought the poem was good it just wasn't clear to me. |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
"Among the stars..." I liked how you ended with this line, makes you think beyond to what happens after you stop reading the poem!(At least for me anyway)  Joy |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
it is very hard to take off the mask.... when you take it off for the wrong people it makes it even harder the next time....but your rite one day we will be free again. Great Work! take care Broken Wings "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I must admit I am somewhat confused here. Is this saying people saw the real you and didn't like it? Well? That happens!!! Interesting work if you just clear this up we'll all understand better.. There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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ShadowHeart Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 49 |
Great job...i'm just a little confused though. I do kinda know what you mean though. Good job, again!!! Love is our greatest weakness but when it's found, it's our greatest strength. |
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Hope, tears, and renewal Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 74 |
I don't know what I was describing here... whether it was happy or sad... Sorry I can't clear it up, but I don't know what I was talking about. Life, maybe? Who knows. The words just sort of... came. |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
Hope~ If you need to cry then let it all out.If you need to shout do it really loud. Who cares who hears ya. Sometimes we let the wrong people in our lives and let them see the real us.That happens and we get go on. It don't really matter what others think. Sometimes being real is hard but its whats best.The real person will come out anyway.better sooner than later. The people that we think we know we often the 1s we know nothing about. Don't hide yourself again the real has been seen. keep it out ~Angie |
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