Dark Poetry #1 |
I,...alone... |
For_Never Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 125Cincinnati, oh, United States of America |
Within a click... silence entails a thousand deaths the tears that fell.. hardend heart...broken faith... one becomes what one hates... I know that pain is shared between.... feared apathy..cracked...alone... Death ensues for the soul... Now when I close my eyes... shadows are all I see.. how do I cope...now knowING the taste.. a clatered thought.. a empty bed... loathing sleep... Dreading the drudging wakeful state.. the pulse quickens... but the energy fadeS.. when blurred visions fail... spirits entwine..pushing apart.. at first by circumstance.. then with heart.. With that click it begins...and at last I know... you and I.. becomes... I,...alone... Edward A. Beerman |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Lovely work For Never, but a sad clicking ending is never the answer.. I know you know this but I gotta say it anyways!! There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
one becomes what one hates... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ My greatest fear. wonderful poem! take care, Broken Wings "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
wow. exceptional work. the words just fit perfectly. and very emotional. incredible ending. Dont wake the dead, Wake the dying, Don't change what you've said, Change what you're saying. |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Great Poem For never, The Pain and negetive emotions are evident throughout...Great Job! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Within a click... silence entails a thousand deaths the tears that fell.. hardend heart...broken faith... one becomes what one hates... I know that pain is shared between.... feared apathy..cracked...alone... Death ensues for the soul... Now when I close my eyes... shadows are all I see.. ------------------ the pulse quickens... but the energy fadeS.. when blurred visions fail... spirits entwine..pushing apart.. at first by circumstance.. then with heart.. With that click it begins...and at last I know... you and I.. becomes... I,...alone... ------------- VERY powerful poem Edward....VERY well written...much depth and emotion... excellent work here, truly take care, jm Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
GREAT Poem For Never!! Piece, Dark_kisses I do not love you for being perfect..... I love you for being perfect for me!! |
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