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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas 
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Purple rage black and blue now fading to a sick yellow I see it there on your face not knowing what to say like so many others i look away as if that can make it better like so many others I pretend everything is right I look through you so I don't have to see it's no wonder that the purple rage is always there a look away a silent admission that I don't care "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Who's rage is this? Yours or the person you speak of? A bit confusing for me at least. But I liked it..  I wish all people would care a little more.. There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
I understood it as you describing what someone else feels as they look at you and then writting a poem on it....(was that confussing?...lol) ....anyway yes, it does feel like they don't care when they turn away or act like everythings ok. If only they would see themselves thru our eyes.GREAT POEM! take care, Broken Wings "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
actually I wrote this about a friend who was in an abusive relationship and I didn't know how to approach her about the bruises that we all started to see so I ignored them until my consience wouldn't let me any longer because I felt by ignoring it I was saying that I didn't care "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
to me, it seems like this might be a victim of abuse. a bruised face and denial. people not knowing what to say or what to do. i could be way off, but that's what i envisioned in the words. anyway, great piece. i love too much, and not enough. |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this is very good. words like this are hard to say. i applaud you for letting your conscience win. this was an excellent work. Dont wake the dead, Wake the dying, Don't change what you've said, Change what you're saying. |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
at first when l read this purple and sick yellow made me think of a junkie..you know someone who is slowly killing themselves and you pretend not to notice because its non of your business..funny isnt it how often people think its non of their business when probably it really is..if only to say hey l care..but of course l read the posts beofre doing mine and erealize its not..still even without the explanantion..l think your message came through loud and clear Tess "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two bodies." -Aristotle |
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