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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
smothering, searing air redolent with rosedust- squalling with siren wails writhing oblivion's convergence increasingly manifest within the being From the peak Never cease From the pit Ever more But between these sheets I rouse to implore pardon to yearn for Lethe can you wash across the beast who screams my name as I fall into the gyre once more |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
very wordy poem i think it is very poetic in a slightly confuseing way but who am i to say a mere wordsmith as myself Did you write the Book of Love And do you have faith in God above If the Bible tells you so Do you believe in rock 'n roll Can music save your mortal soul And can you teach me how to dance real slow |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
excellent jannel..cryptic and dark..very good...nice choice of unusual words..made for an intriuging read. take care, jm Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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demonic~angel Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 54Kansas |
Very dark and wonderfully written...An awesome choice of words...very descriptive... Messenger of fear in sight Dark deception kills the light ~Metallica~ |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
thank you janet, walter, and DA for your replies. this was a thesaurus work. i wrote it, and then went through the thesaurus to find the right words to fit what i was trying to convey. the idea is of an addiction to anything. From the highest point, the person wants to stay there forever, and from the low that follows, they want more. but in between, they realize their faults and wish to stop. Dont wake the dead, Wake the dying, Don't change what you've said, Change what you're saying. |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Very good poem Jannel.  |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
I had to reread, and that in it's self, made me think. unusual, good. Joel I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Jannel~ I'm sorry to say that I had no idea what this was about, then I read your reply...now it makes perfect sence to me... Very creative.... -SEA |
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