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~Perdition~
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~Perdition~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Perdition~ Suffer in silence Drown in tears Bleed out your eyes Suffocate in fears Dressed in Denial Broken by rejection Loss of desire Void of reflection Die once, die twice Screams cry in your ears Haunted by the past Damaged by the years Curses of fate Mirrors shard and shattered Eyes of lies Bleeding, bruised and battered Rage and anger Secrets of shame Pain of pleasure Unrelenting blame Bonded by blood Severed by sorrow Ties that bind Sin to borrow Dance with the devil Call out his name Look in his eyes Burned by the flame Ashes to ashes Dust to dust Alibis of lies Lust of trust Sacrifice of innocence Pain to gain Obsessive behavior Ever a scarring stain Evil in mind Day and night Shadows follow Darkness and light No longer a hostage Break free, break way Chains unlocked Forever this price to pay Janet Marie ** written for a friend 11/12/99 |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i like this poem-though for this reader,though the beginning captivates my attention(i like the 2nd stanza-very powerful) but as it progresses on,this reader is just reading words and having little emotional response.... but i really like the inclusion of the devil here--devil's advocate,huh  ") |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
one word....Awesome! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thanks my sweet jer, your awesome as well. Kaile...thanks for the read, I know this ones a little cryptic...it was written that way by request of the person who its about...its one of those--"read between the lines" kind of poems...it speaks of a very specific subject in his life...the reason he felt he lived in "perdition"...IE "hell on earth"...anyway, maybe this footnote will help make the emotions of the poem more clear..sometimes it hard to know what the poet intended. Thanks take care, jm |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
You are a smart lady aren't you? We all have a little of our own hell on Earth, could relate in ways.. As always, well done hon!!  There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
WONDERFUL!...hell, ahhh... a all too familiar place. take care, Broken Wings< !signature--> "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT [This message has been edited by Broken Wings (edited 03-23-2000).] |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
WOW Janet good job !!! Don't know what else to say this was powerful and great!!! "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
A great..GREAT...piece So many of my emotions I feel within this piece... I am overwhelmed...which does not happen often.... Great Work! |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this was incredible. i so loved the ashes to ashes stanza, as well as the whole thing. just wow. jannel Dont wake the dead, Wake the dying, Don't change what you've said, Change what you're saying. |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
Alibis of lies Lust of trust these were the lines that stuck in my mind...deception and all that goes with it a poem to make me think..l like the cryptic stuff where all is not straightforward!! "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two bodies." -Aristotle |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thanks to ALL for the compliments and kind words....most of all for reading... Isis, i been called alot of things...smart aint one of them...LOL..or did you mean smart-mouth..now that one... oh yes...  Starr, Broken Wings, Jannel and Tess, thanks for the wows and enthusiastic replies...  dhuron...thank you for being so effected by my words and letting me know so kindly. thanks guys... take care, jm Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
ok...as always...WOW! you've done it again! gotta agree with broken wings on this one...hell is an all too familiar place! i think the cryptic-ness of it is what makes it so powerful -- harsher and more haunting!******** Curses of fate Mirrors shard and shattered Eyes of lies Bleeding, bruised and battered ******** couldn't really explain why, but this is my favorite stanza. it affects me...like it's reminding me of something, part of my past...like unable to control my life, feeling like my world is shattered, i can see the lying eyes in my mind, the last part is the way my heart and soul feel after my life falls apart...deep, thought provoking...and, of course, loved it! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Bonded by blood Severed by sorrow Ties that bind Sin to borrow Dance with the devil Call out his name Look in his eyes Burned by the flame Ashes to ashes Dust to dust Alibis of lies Lust of trust Good grief, this one sure hits the target of how it feels! |
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