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another dark haiku:) |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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An Empty Old Woman Sits still,gazing out This withered lone red rose stands Hollow existence |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
so true of those who've lost their will to live in their old age. can't see the beautiful rose that she still is. well done! i love what you do with haiku!  |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
THIS IS AWSOME! few words and yet filled with so much emotion. EXCELLENT! take care, Broken Wings "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Haikus never made much sense to me. But your topic selection is great. Comparing an old woman with a rose..perhaps the last rose on the bush..as all the rest have withered away.... good work |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
i absolutely love these! Dont wake the dead, Wake the dying, Don't change what you've said, Change what you're saying. |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
This was great..you captured the image of someone who's life is gone from them..although they are still living... Tess "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two bodies." -Aristotle |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thank you all for responding and for your input....you have seen things that i have never thought about when i wrote this...like dhuron's image of a single rose on a bush....hmmmm...interesting ")thank you guys once again....i love haiku and will strive to write more better ones ") |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I think that you're doing a fine job right now. . . you seem to have captured the spirit of haiku very well. . . Excellent job. . . -------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
I'm finally registered here. And wow! this poem seems so... profound? what exactly were your thoughts when u wrote this? |
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