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My eyes, My Body And My heart
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My eyes, My Body And My heart |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas 
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Paint my face Black and white Cover my eyes So I have no sight Without my eyes I see no sins Cover them well So he can not win Tie me down On to the bed Make it tight So the evil is dead Without my arms I can not feel The heartless memory Of Satan's deal Take my heart And hide it well Secure the box So Satan can not sell Without my heart I can not cry About the painful day When I die I do not love you for being perfect..... I love you for being perfect for me!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Paint my face Black and white Cover my eyes So I have no sight Without my eyes I see no sins Cover them well So he can not win Tie me down On to the bed Make it tight So the evil is dead ------------- this is awesome...excellent rhyme flow...i love the images of trying to deny evil's influences...very well written. take care, jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
GREAT! So much struggle and strife within your poem. Trying not to give in into temptation. A remarkable Piece Dhuron |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent, but you cannot give in. . . cutting yourself off from the pain will not work. . . You have really captured the futility of it all in this poem. . . Welcome, my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Excellent piece, loved the theme, the pain etc. But I don't believe as you do. I believe if you cannot cry or refuse to cry you are no longer a feeling person, just a shell and who wants to be cast upon life's beach always? Not I! Wonderful work  There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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