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Pardon to a Sin |
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mcclain Junior Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 13 |
Wish filled lies fall from our lips Our desire explodes - fierce and ruthless Expecting to be noticed, it shakes our hearts With a force neither can retain Sleepless nights give way to lustfull spirits Dreams, a bridge to a discontented reality Over waves of desperation Awakening guilt replaces stealthy dreaming Fear of roads with no u-turns Scrambling for old comforts Nightmares, a bridge to repentfullness Over oceans filled with sharp-toothed serpents Hungry for our souls [This message has been edited by mcclain (edited 03-22-2000).] |
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demonic~angel Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 54Kansas |
OMG!!! that is soooo awesome...very dark and mysterioulsy written...great work..*huggz* Messenger of fear in sight Dark deception kills the light ~Metallica~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Hi and welcome... I just read your first post as well, very well written, you use lots of emotional imagery... look forward to more of your work... take care, jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this is your first work that i have read, and i really liked it. wonderful use of words and images. jannel Dont wake the dead, Wake the dying, Don't change what you've said, Change what you're saying. |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
This is so good, I really like these lines: Nightmares, a bridge to repentfullness Over oceans filled with sharp-toothed serpents Hungry for our souls So dark and using the ocean..*chills*.... wonderful work |
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