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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon 
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bear with me a story bold hidden hurt that longs be told call me not into love's chamber drench me cold within your anger I've not one more smile to give this the life I've chose to live nothing less, a tale of woe delve into my heart shadow darkness falls across my lips tears slip down in crimson drips you'll not see my secret room or ever share my love in bloom each day I live, draws me near to the rest I hold so dear someday I'll sleep to ne'er wake your painful love I shall forsake touch me not, nor hold me close my heart is like a dying rose in your mind I'm yours to save my life is yours, because you gave I cannot trod this rugged path is my solitude too much to ask? the ache within overwhelms with no captain at my soul's helm bid me into welcome sleep take my soul into thy keep this my prayer I beg of God set me from this mortal sod nope I'm not suicidal just stressed and this is what happened  |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
Great poem. i loved this one. it is truly heartfelt and emotional. i have been in the spot that this poem describes and i know how it feels. its a bad feeling to have. well i just wanted to say that i loved this poem. cant wait to read more of your work. All we are is dust in the wind.... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Angel, you reached deep with this one. I can relate to the refusal to accept love so evident in this piece, many of us probably can. Very painful and very moving poem. Michael |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Very moving and emotional piece here. When stressed sometimes we produce our best poems ever!! That looks as though it may be the case here!! Bravo hon There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
*IF* You copied and pasted what has already been said regarding this poem.. you have how it affected me! The emotion is raw and the words well expressed. Very good. Kim |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Angel, Raw powerful emotion. Well said. I loved it. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
X-Angel you did a really great job on this !! "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Thanks guys I almost deleted it, but kept it at Michael's request *sigh*. It's funny that you all liked a poem I thought was so terrible! I wrote it in about 5 minutes and was pretty stressed when I did...maybe I should stress out on paper more often! LOL*smiles* ~X~ |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
beatiful. this flowed very nicely and expresed emotion well. Dont wake the dead, Wake the dying, Don't change what you've said, Change what you're saying. |
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