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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
I walked into the dark a place I prefer not to know It cloaks my heart My thoughts become muddled in confusion’s grasp Things I thought I understood are now raw and foreign I’d really rather be anywhere but here. Like shattered glass the pieces fall Each striking hard Slashing yet another piece of my soul. With shrill cries I sob my last heave of emptiness from my wounded chest The question rakes like hard edged nails across my mind. Do you care? KdW, Copyright 3/00 |
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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon |
"Like shattered glass the pieces fall Each striking hard Slashing yet another piece of my soul." Such a powerful image! This is wonderful Kim. Definately one of your best! Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night. -Edgar Allen Poe |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
kim, very good...your angst and pain drip in this...so well expressed. take care, jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
Things I thought I understood are now raw and foreign I’d really rather be anywhere but here. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Great poem kim, i felt the pain with the opening line. GREAT!! take care, Broken Wings "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
great imagery. full of feeling. jannel Dont wake the dead, Wake the dying, Don't change what you've said, Change what you're saying. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
A question silence answers far louder than any words!!! *Sigh* I felt this one. great poem. michael |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
*Michael* Silence in response to such a question is painful where-as silence shared with someone...well that IS entirely different isn't it? Thank you all for your comments on this. I really do not know where my mind travelled, but it begged me to go.. and this is it's outcome. Kim |
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