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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Frustraion; anger Disappointament; upset Dark emotions added to the war. The soul is weary; full of holes and battle scars. Scars from the eternal struggle Purity diluted Dreams and hopes fade Feeling malignet Why continue, when one becomes a disease to the body When the soul calapses and becomes a black hole When the disease spreads, and infects others. The disease should be purged The soul is unable; desparately losing the struggle. Calls out, no answer The soul is broken detached and drifts into the engulfing darkness The heart and mind faulter, unable to struggle furthermore. The vessel remains empty and desolate as it begins to wither away |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
welcome to passions...you make a perfect and dark impression with this one...very well expressed emotions in this. nice to have you here take care, jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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demonic~angel Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 54Kansas |
 Very dark and full of imagery...Welcome to Dark...Wonderfully written...Keep up the great work...*huggz* Welcome again... Messenger of fear in sight Dark deception kills the light ~Metallica~ |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Welcome to Dark Passions dhuron....excellent poem here...looking forward to more.. Yours truly, Angel "The dark weight of the hour humming madly filling my head with blood and sorrow and dread the executioner's song." -Jewel "The Dark Bells" ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
welcome welcome welcome. very mice first post. i enjoyed the deep emotions. jannel "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
welcome welcome welcome. very mice first post. i enjoyed the deep emotions. jannel "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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CrEaTuRe Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia |
Welcome to Passion and especialy to DP ....this first post it nice and full of emotions ..... |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Very emotional version of war myself i prefer the blood and gore but this is good too walter Did you write the Book of Love And do you have faith in God above If the Bible tells you so Do you believe in rock 'n roll Can music save your mortal soul And can you teach me how to dance real slow |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
such a vivid depiction of war whether it be physical, emotional, mental, or verbal...wow! so many wonderful lines but i love the imagery in this one... ***** The soul is weary; full of holes and battle scars. Scars from the eternal struggle ***** adds so much reality and vividness to what you are saying...not just a broken soul but completely scarred and bloody...wow! WELCOME to passions, my friend!  |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods |
Welcome! You have a special way of writing, I like it. Looking forward to read more. Take care! Broken |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Welcome Indeed!! What an impression you have made with this your first posting!! I enjoyed it so much. Awaiting Part 2? There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Thank you Isis, Part two is The Journey...I hope you enjoy it Thank you all |
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